Tuesday 8 August 2017

my quick write

Quick Write (Please make a copy and move this into your writing folder) Once upon a time there was a man he was looking for a secret money. There was only a place that had that secret in it i can not tell you what it is because it is a secret and know one knows where it lived. Sometimes almost every day they were looking for that secret and know one never found it and they never ever found it until someone tell them where it is because only one person new where it was but they did not know. They didn’t even know what was the secret only one who lived in the jungle close to the secret and then one day he just saw a little kid he was trying to find what was the secret and the guy said i should keep him and he did. So one day the little kid he growed bigger and bigger and that day was the day that the old guy was going to tell him where it was and then suddenly he told him so the guy went to go and show him where it was and when he showed him he went back home and the guy stayed there and then he decided to jump in he did not want to but he did it anyway

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